This month we are learning how to add dialog to our stories to make them more interesting.
We brainstormed a bunch of words to use instead of "said"
because, let's face it, "said" doesn't really have much personality.
because, let's face it, "said" doesn't really have much personality.
A few students sent in their creative dialogs, so I thought I should share them with the world.
Feel free to leave a comment for any of our authors.
Cat + Dog + Lizard
By Mia
"I do not like the rainy
weather!" exclaimed the cat.
"Bad weather means no birds!"
she muttered.
"I don't like the rain
either!" barked the dog. "If I get muddy I will have to take a
bath!" he barked.
"I wish I could feel the rain!"
argued the lizard. "I live in an aquarium now, and I don't get any rain
anymore. I imagine it is so warm and soft!"
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Rosie + Lovers
By Rain
"I wish you weren't in that
cage," purred Rosie.
"I like my cage!" squeaked
Lovers, who was hiding in her house.
"If you were not in a cage we
could run and play chase all day," wickedly replied Rosie. Rosie mumbled
to herself," That would be a very fun day."
"I am quite happy inside my cage
where it's nice and cozy," responded Lovers.
Rosie scampered off angrily knowing
there is no use trying to get Lovers to come out and play.
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Xbox + Teagan
By Teagan
My
Xbox asked, "What would you like to do today?"
"I
would like to play MW3," I replied.
"What
mode would you like to play?" my Xbox asked.
I
replied, "Survival."
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Cat + Dog + Lizard
By Mia
"I do not like the rainy
weather!" exclaimed the cat.
"Bad weather means no birds!"
she muttered.
"I don't like the rain
either!" barked the dog. "If I get muddy I will have to take a
bath!" he barked.
"I wish I could feel the rain!"
argued the lizard. "I live in an aquarium now, and I don't get any rain
anymore. I imagine it is so warm and soft!"
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Mom + Zee + Amaya
By Amaya
"MOM!"
Zee shouted, "They are here, they are here!"
"Who's
here?" Mom said in a puzzled voice.
"The
zombies," Zee said while shaking, "They are going to take over the
WHOLE population of humans!"
"Well,"
Mom said in a low tone, "you better hide. I hear moaning!"
"Okay,"
Zee said nervously, "where?"
"In
the CLOSET!" Mom shouted.
Amaya
walked down stairs wearing a costume. "Where is she?" Amaya
whispered.
"In the closet," Mom said
quietly.
"Okay
thanks," Amaya whispered. "BAH!" Amaya said when she opened the
door.
"AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!"
Zee screamed, "Hey, that’s not funny!"
"Rude,"
Zee smirked while Amaya was rolling on the floor laughing.
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Rosie + Lovers
By Rain
"I wish you weren't in that
cage," purred Rosie.
"I like my cage!" squeaked
Lovers, who was hiding in her house.
"If you were not in a cage we
could run and play chase all day," wickedly replied Rosie. Rosie mumbled
to herself," That would be a very fun day."
"I am quite happy inside my cage
where it's nice and cozy," responded Lovers.
Rosie scampered off angrily knowing
there is no use trying to get Lovers to come out and play.
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Book + Shelf
By Bethany
"Oh, I'm so tired!" cried the
book. “I have to get picked up and read almost every day!”
"You
wimp!" replied the shelf. "I have to hold you and your friends for
longer than it takes them humans to read you!
“My work
is pretty hard also!” exclaimed the book.
“I wasn’t
saying that your work ISN’T hard I was just saying that in my opinion my job is
harder.”
“There is
only one way to solve that…”
JOIN US NEXT TIME FOR THE
BOOK AND THE SHELF RETURN!
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Fridge + Table
By Abigail
"What a beautiful morning!"
exclaimed the table. "Everyone is so happy and cheerful."
"I wish I could be happy,"
cried the fridge.
"Why are you sad?" asked the
table.
"Well, I'm sad because no one has
come to see me this morning," responded the fridge.
"Well you don’t need to be
sad," assured the table.
"Really!" yelled the fridge.
"Well why not, the morning has
just started," said the table.
"Wow thank you so much for
cheering me up you’re a good friend," replied the fridge.
"That’s what friends are
for," laughed the table.
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For the complete April Writing Dialog assignment packet, click here.
I'm excited to read more dialogs from my talented students, so keep them coming!
